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I thought "The Power of the Vision" was a pretty good title. :)
Nothing wrong with the title. I have noticed, however, that the titles in
= "Dark Horizon"
make little sense. What exactly does "Forms Change" mean? On
the other ha= nd
I'm taking the strangeness in the titles as a "Dark Horizon" sort of thing.
>She was very torn and it was difficult for her to decide. In=20
the end, Kyle coming on a bit too strong for her really made the decision.
She didn't so much as run back to Jack,=20 but away from Kyle and her own
worries about what might happen.
I got that impression too.
>Jack does have his negative points. :)
I'm getting that impression.
>I think you're referring to the get together of some of the
officers for pizza...
>It was more Lee McGuire and Falco who were bashing poor old=20
Jack. They don't like him for their own reasons. McGuire has thought Jack
was unbalanced because of the search of his=20 communications that led to
the inference that he might be a spy of some kind. McGuire doesn't take
things like that very well.
But it seems that Jack's inference is correct! McGuire seems to have his
own issues if he can't acceot the concept of a spy on board.
>As to Yed Post Four... I think it's the word "Yed". :)
>Yed Post is an actual star, by the way. Also known as Epsilon
Ophiuchi, it's located about 90 light years away and is a G9 III type star.
(Just in case anyone was curious.)
In other words, it's fair game for me to use if I so choose.
>It was my thinking that quite a large number of people would
beam down. But, I also think a lot of people would come down in shuttles
and other small craft. We are talking about a lot of people after all.
There were fifteen thousand in the Auditorium for Mei-Wan's keynote
address. Add the usual traffic to that world and there'd probably be more
than a few folks who'd be coming down in shuttles instead of beaming down.
Okay, I can accept that, and I can accept Jay's comments too about transpor= ter
use costing a lot of energy.
>As far as the Skorr and their attack, with all the other traffic=20
would anyone have naturally assumed they were going to attack until they
had already done so?
Well, presumably the Skorr attacked in a number of their attack craft, so u= nless
such craft are used by the Skorr for all kinds of other missions, as soon a= s a
swarm of such craft are launched, some kind of alarm should have sounded.
>However, as I consider it, I think you have a valid point. It might
have made the story a little tighter if I had dealt with that issue
directly and given some explanation as to why no other ship in orbit
sounded a warning.
Or simply alter things slightly to indicate that a warning was issued, but = there
was little that could be done since the planet and the location on the surf= ace
had minimal protection, or perhaps have the Skorr use a different type of
vessel than normal.
>Not my invention. The Skorr were a warrior race introduced in the
animated series episode, "The Jihad" in which a Skorr
religious=20 relic had been stolen and that was about to drive the Skorr to
war with the Galaxy. I've always liked the religious-warrior aspect of the
Skorr and thought they would fit in rather well as part of Janus Osmand's
movement.
That's obviously where I heard of them. I mean, it's been twenty-five yea=
rs since I last
saw an episode of the animated series, or read the Allen Dean Foster adapta= tions of
them. It's curious that little bit of recognition remains in my mind after=
all of those years.
>I put that together myself combining eight or nine Poser rendered
images along with the room, outside background, and the image of Mei-Wan.
As far as some of the women in the image being=20 "overstacked"
that's due in part to the primary and less memory taxing female model in
Poser not being as adjustable as I might like and the clothes for her being
even less so.
>Besides, isn't Trek all about "overstacked" women? :)
Which is why on the Athena, the padded bras are left in the prop room.
>By the way, there are a couple of little cameos in that image=20
hidden among the crowd.
I guess it's time to take another look at the image. It's a real phony bac= kground
for a real photo of (the actress who plays) Mei-Wan, but it's fun to look a= t.
>There's not so much secrecy about them as they aren't well=20
known to Jack or the Federation.
>Corsica I wouldn't actually consider a "big thing" or all that=20
mysterious really. He's a being who's gotten around a bit and knows more
than someone who grows up in the Federation. True, Jack nor most anyone
else in the Federation would know his people or their world, but that
doesn't make him mysterious, just=20 unknown. I think there is a
difference.
Okay, he just acts like he's mysterious or something, as that is the impres= sion
I got from the story.
>The point of Corsica in the story is to say that there is a lot
more going on in the Galaxy than just the Federation and what they
generally know about. To say that the Galaxy is a big place, a=20 really
big place. After all, Trek is supposed to be about new life forms and new
civilizations. :)
A lot more than the Federation, but when Corsica starts throwing around men= tion
of the Magellanic Clouds, my first question was, "how did he get
there?" M= aybe
the how will be answered.
>The G'voda are new as far as the Federation is concerned. They=20
haven't heard of them before. But I don't think Q implied they were new to
everyone in the Galaxy.
No, just that the Federation had never heard if them, but they have been ar= ound.
Presumably the G'voda have other ways of travelling besides their big ships=
,
since their big ships make appearances that can't be missed. It is just th= at
given the increasing backstory around the Borg, for example, the Federation
should somehow know that something about the G'voda. Afterall, it seems
unlikely that the G'voda scout ship would be entering this region of space
= and
picking the first Federation citizen that they encountered to be their spy.
>Why would Q have mentioned the spy? I don't really see the
Q as being all that helpful toward humanity. At least not on an immediate
personal level.
I didn't expect Q to come off and say that directly, but given the nature o= f Q,
I thought that perhaps he might have slipped in a little hint or clue in th= ere
about the spy, perhaps something not obvious and something that Jack McCall
might not recognize until after the fact.
>The phrase "it seemed more a shiny solid than non-material energy"
refers back to the "glowing energy". I think I've got that=20
structured correctly. Did it come off to you to be referring back=20 to
the word "hull" in the sentence?
The "it" referred to the ship as a whole as I read it. I
understand now th= at
you were saying that the energy was so intense it seemed solid. Reading it
the opposite way just seemed closer to what you wanted to say about the
ship. English third-person neuter pronouns aren't very precise in what
their antecedents are, I guess.
>I'm hard at work on Story #5, "Point Of A Far Encounter" and hope
to have it finished up in the next week or two.
>Thanks for your comments and thanks for reading.
Looking forward to the story.
Steve
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I thought "The Power of the Vision" was a pretty good title.
:)Nothing wrong with the
title. I have
noticed, however, that the titles in "Dark
Horizon"
make little sense. What
exactly does "Forms
Change" mean? On the other hand
I'm taking the strangeness in the
titles as a
"Dark
Horizon" sort of thing.
>She was very torn and it was difficult for her
to decide. In
the end, Kyle coming on a bit too strong for her really madethe
decision. She didn't so much as run back to Jack, but
away from Kyle and her own worries about what might
happen.
I got that impression
too.
>Jack does have his negative points.
:)
I'm getting that
impression.>I
think you're referring to the get together of some of theofficers
for pizza...>It was more Lee McGuire and Falco
who were bashing poor old
Jack. They don't like him for their own
reasons. McGuire
hasthought Jack was unbalanced because of the search of his
communications that led to the inference that he might be a spy
ofsome
kind. McGuire doesn't take things like that very well.
But it seems that Jack's inference is
correct! McGuire seems to have
his own issues if he can't acceot
the concept of a
spy on board.>As to Yed Post
Four... I think it's the word "Yed".
:)>Yed Post is an actual star, by the
way. Also known as
EpsilonOphiuchi, it's located about 90 light years away and is a
G9 IIItype star. (Just in case anyone was
curious.)
In other words, it's fair game for
me to use if I
so choose.
>It was my thinking that quite a large number of people
wouldbeam down. But, I also think a lot of people would
comedown in shuttles and other small craft. We are
talking abouta lot of people
after all. There were fifteen thousand in theAuditorium
for Mei-Wan's keynote address. Add the usual trafficto
that world and there'd probably be more than a few folks who'dbe
coming down in shuttles instead of
beaming down.
Okay, I can accept that, and I can
accept Jay's
comments too about transporter
use costing a lot of
energy.
>As far as the Skorr and their attack, with all the other traffic
would anyone have naturally assumed they were going to attack
untilthey
had already done so?
Well, presumably the Skorr
attacked in a number of
their attack craft, so unless
such craft are used by the Skorr
for all kinds of
other missions, as soon as a
swarm of such craft are launched,
some kind of
alarm should have sounded.
>However, as I consider it, I think you have a
valid point.
It
mighthave made the story a little tighter if I had dealt with
that issuedirectly and given some explanation as to why no other
ship inorbit
sounded a warning.
Or simply alter things slightly to
indicate that a
warning was issued, but there
was little that could be done
since the planet and
the location on the surface
had minimal protection, or perhaps
have the Skorr
use a different type of
vessel than
normal.
>Not my invention. The Skorr were a
warrior race introduced
in
theanimated series episode, "The Jihad" in which a
Skorr religious
relic
had been stolen and that was about to drive the Skorr to warwith
the Galaxy. I've always liked the religious-warrior
aspectof the Skorr and
thought they would fit in rather well aspart of Janus Osmand's
movement.That's obviously
where I heard of them. I mean, it's been twenty-five
years since I last
saw an episode of the animated
series, or read the
Allen Dean Foster adaptations of
them. It's curious that
little bit of
recognition remains in my mind after all of those years.
>I put that together myself combining eight or nine Poser
renderedimages along with the room, outside background, and the
imageof Mei-Wan. As far as some of the women in the
image being "overstacked" that's due in part to the
primary and less memorytaxing female model in Poser not being as
adjustable as I might likeand the clothes for her being even less
so.>Besides, isn't Trek all about
"overstacked" women? :)
Which is why on the Athena, the
padded bras are
left in the prop room.>By the way,
there are a couple of little cameos in that image hidden among
the crowd.
I guess it's time to take another
look at the
image. It's a real phony background
for a real photo of (the actress who plays)
Mei-Wan, but it's fun to look at.
>There's not so much secrecy about them as they
aren't well
known to Jack or the
Federation.>Corsica I wouldn't actually
consider a "big thing" or all that mysterious
really. He's a being who's gotten around a bit andknows
more than someone who grows up in the Federation.
True,Jack nor most anyone else in the Federation would know his
peopleor their world, but that doesn't make him mysterious, just
unknown. I think there is a difference.
Okay, he just acts like he's mysterious or
something, as that is the impression
I got from the
story.
>The point of Corsica in the story is to say
that there is a
lotmore going on in the Galaxy than just the Federation and what
theygenerally know about. To say that the Galaxy is a
big place, a
really big place. After all, Trek is supposed to be
aboutnew life
forms and new civilizations. :)
A lot more than the Federation,
but when Corsica
starts throwing around mention
of the Magellanic Clouds, my first
question was,
"how did he get there?" Maybe
the how will be
answered.
>The G'voda are new as far as the Federation is
concerned.
They haven't heard of them before. But I don't think Q
implied theywere new to everyone in the
Galaxy.
No, just that the Federation had
never heard if
them, but they have been around.
Presumably the G'voda have other ways of
travelling
besides their big ships,
since their big ships make
appearances that can't
be missed. It is just that
given the increasing backstory
around the Borg,
for
example, the Federation
should somehow know that something about the
G'voda. Afterall, it seems
unlikely that the G'voda scout ship would be
entering this region of space and
picking the first Federation
citizen that they
encountered to be their spy.
>Why would Q have mentioned the spy?
I don't really see
theQ as being all that helpful toward humanity. At
least not on animmediate personal level.
I didn't expect Q to come off and say that
directly, but given the nature of Q,
I thought that perhaps he might
have slipped in a
little hint or clue in there
about the spy, perhaps something
not obvious and
something that Jack
McCall might not recognize until after the
fact.
>The
phrase "it seemed more a shiny
solid than non-material energy"refers back to the
"glowing energy". I think I've got that
structured correctly. Did it come off to you to be
referring back to the word "hull" in the sentence?
The "it" referred to the
ship as a whole as I read
it. I understand now that
you were saying that the energy
was so intense it
seemed solid. Reading
it the opposite way just seemed
closer to what you
wanted to say about
the ship. English
third-person neuter
pronouns aren't very precise in what
their antecedents are, I
guess.>I'm hard at work on Story
#5, "Point Of A Far Encounter" and hopeto have it
finished up in the next week or two.>Thanks for
your comments and thanks for reading.
Looking forward to the
story.
Steve
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